Hitting bottom

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Eva hadn’t seen her old dentist in years. While visiting family she lost a filling and made an appointment.

Nothing and everything had changed since Eva was a kid.   Doc and his nurse were old.   She was with him over 30 years. Equipment and furnishings were ancient—the place, and Doc, were shabby-looking.

Doc didn’t keep up with the times.   Patients left for dentists who did.   Some said he was a drunk—that was why he neglected his practice.   Others claimed he was the cheapest dentist around—maybe too cheap.

Eva’s memories of him gave her the resolve to sit in the chair.

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Friday Fictioneers @ Rochelle Wisoff-Fields   Addicted to Purple
Photo Prompt:  Copyright Ted Strutz
Word Count:  100

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Many thanks to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields  for hosting Friday Fictioneers

 

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29 comments on “Hitting bottom
  1. Doobster418 says:

    This story was too short for me to sink my teeth into, he said sardonically. Ouch!

    • Lucy says:

      100 words, Doobster. Can’t say much in 100 words. I hate dental jokes. Ouch. I seriously could think of nothing. I did have a little something that was all dialog, then I thought I might offend half the blogosphere. Not that any them follow me. I’ll copy and paste my alternate story to you . Lucy

  2. Ah.. I would guess that it could be a painful end.. but maybe Doc just needed some appreciation…

  3. hafong says:

    I don’t think I would stay in the chair.

  4. Kate Loveton says:

    Eva’s a better woman than I – she must have some really good memories to risk sitting in that chair! I liked that ending . Very matter-of-fact.

  5. Sandra says:

    No… I don’t think my memories of a dentist could ever be good enough to persuade me to visit if I thought he was a drunk. Altruism, don’t you just hate it? Nice one.

    • Lucy says:

      Thanks. My first draft I had her running out the door and down the street. But then I thought it was too cruel. Personally, that would be me running. Thanks for coming by. Lucy

  6. Dear Lucy,

    There was something poignant about this. The fact that his nurse had been with him for thirty years touched me. There had to have been something that made her want to sit in that chair. Growing up we went to the same doctor. He delivered both my brother and me and took care of us into our adult years. His nurse, Shirley, was with him until she passed away. It was never the same after that. Needless to say, while your story was about a dentist, it brought back pleasant memories for me.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    • Lucy says:

      Thank you. I wasn’t sure if I should have defined their relationship more. But, I also had a doctor until he finally retired. His nurse was with him for decades. Why they stay is beyond me. Is it loyalty or just being comfortable in a job? I’m glad it brought back pleasant memories. Most people are telling me that they would never get in that chair. Thanks again. Lucy

  7. Ms. Felicity says:

    I actually like the story but I just hope I would know the deeper connection between Eva and the dentist. 🙂

    • Lucy says:

      Well, I’m glad you liked it. I found it very difficult to get all that in with only 100 words. A better writer could have done that I think. I was thinking that she went to him from a child until she went off to college so she remembers all the office visits and is upset about what happened to him. I think it was just altruistic on her part–she felt sorry for him. I wouldn’t choose to sit in the chair–I’d be running out the door. Lucy

  8. tedstrutz says:

    I liked your story. The last line begs many questions, but I found it comforting.

    • Lucy says:

      Aww. Thanks. In the first draft she goes running out the door and down the street, never to go into that area again. But, it seemed so cruel. Thanks for coming by. Lucy

  9. ahtdoucette says:

    Ouch. Hope it all works out for her! I can almost feel her pain. Well done.

  10. Lucy, If she had fond memories of him, he probably wasn’t that bad a dentist. I might take a chance with him, unless his eyesight had become bad. Then, I might drop by to say, “Hello,” and leave right after. Sometimes it’s best to ask around first. Well written. 🙂 —Susan

  11. I think they call this being loyal to a fault.

  12. Good for Eva. Loyalty’s a great thing.

    • Lucy says:

      Thanks. I think the alternate response would have been too cruel. Thanks for that comment. And thanks for stopping by. Happy Father;s day if it’s appropriate. Lucy

  13. Sometimes loyalty is all an old practitioner needs. Lovely story

  14. Sarah Ann says:

    Good for her. I just hope her faith was rewarded. I really like your take on the prompt.

  15. Nan Falkner says:

    Dear Lucy, Good story and I enjoyed reading others comments of it too! You did a good job! Thanks, Nan 🙂

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